I think...
something happened,
there in the sky.
Wind got angry and warm,
and broke all her norms,
converted herself- a big thunderstrom,
It was roaring like, lion in the forest.
Sun was wise,
He kept himself aside.
It was dark all around,
Thunderstorm and lightning...
It was nothing but frightening!
Just to ease; thunderstorm pain,
And to persuade her, God sent her best friend- beautiful rain!
Rain persuaded her long,
And said, you kindly stop
And let me sing a song.
It was my mistake,
And I was entirely wrong.
Its Ok, you didn't like my view,
But the fact is that,
I Love You...
~M.J
P.S.: Since yesterday evening the Delhi weather is so cool and pleasing..I am loving it:)
Wow.. That's just beautiful.. Through your words the whole view of this instant came live in front of me in my imaginations. Truly beautiful creation:)
ReplyDeleteThanks you Sonia and I am very Happy that you liked this creation:) :)
Deletei just loved the way this particular poem rhymed
ReplyDeleteThank you so much Sujatha ma'am:)
DeleteMithlash, start using commas and full stops. The structure of your poems is really good. If you add the proper punctuation, it will sound more professional.
ReplyDeleteIt's a lovely poem...:)
Thank you so much Saru and after a long time I am getting your feedback on my poem, Next time onward I will make sure to use comma and fullstop.
DeleteThank you so much once again:)
Beautiful! Thunderstorm's pain! Nicely put Mithlash.
ReplyDeleteWhen I read the topic, I thought the post was about something different. A nice suprise :-)
Thanks Jenny....I love to give surprise...hope you liked it:)
DeleteGod sent her best friend- beautiful rain,, mujhe bhi rain bahut pasand thi, but now i fear of it, due to some imbalances in life, ab pata ni kyu rain se bhi darr lagta,,
ReplyDeleteI think you r relating RAIN to your past...Take rain as your healer balm and see how it heals your past and prepare you for the future ...Just give one chance to Rain n see how magically it heals you...btw thank for reading:)
DeleteThank you Ashwini....I am happy to get Wow from you:)
ReplyDeleteNature has its own way of expressing :)
ReplyDeleteIn the end, the fact that you love her is what matters :) Lovely write up :)
Thanks Philo:)
DeleteAlways a pleasure to read your work :)
DeleteBeautiful, I so want to get drenched now...:)
ReplyDeleteSaru you made my day with this comment. I am so happy:)
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