My eyes got life,
when they met your eyes.
Though you were stranger,
but you were looking so nice!
Cool breeze…
Lifting your hair in the air,
like inviting my eyes,
to stare.
you arouse the curiosity,
of my heart,
When your eyes met
with mine.
After a long time
I experienced something
like this,
I don’t know,
Who was that girl,
But my heart will certainly miss…
~Mithlash~
Beautiful.. Well expressed Mithlash.. You bring out the emotions so well in your words.. Flow of the words is truly mesmerizing:) Good work...
ReplyDeleteThank you so much Sonia for your beautiful comment. I felt happy that you liked it:)
DeleteNice flow of words. Could feel the experience and the flutters of the heart when her eyes met with yours!
ReplyDeleteThank you so much Jenny, wish if I could extend that moment a bit, but all of sudden my friend said lets go home and I didn't want to tell him what was going on...
Deletewow...wow....Lovely words there....
ReplyDeleteand i pray that whoever that may, you find her soon to look into those beautiful eyes again...:))
Thank you...Thank you for your prayer...But I think that moment wont come because I rarely hang around there..But its ok I got the wonderful moment to cherish:):)
DeleteThis is short and sweet poem. Somehow, I feel you write in hindi or on nature better.
ReplyDeleteYou feel right that I write in hindi or nature better as hindi is very familiar to me than English, so my feelings dont struggle too much to convert them into hindi words means I can play with hindi words easily. The fact is I want make grip on English which I think, will certainly take time to mature on this language. But I keep writing in Hindi now onwards.
DeleteThank you so much for your nice observation n reading my poem:)
it is definitely a very sweet poem...and the imagery of the girls hair in the breeze ...that i feel many men feel so ..they are attracted to it and many remember the way the girl's hair moved/looked/waved in the wind
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